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The following career objective statements are not effective. What is wrong with each statement as it stands? Which statements could be revised to be satisfactory? Which should be dropped?
1. To use my acquired knowledge of accounting to eventually own my own business.
2. A progressively responsible position as a MARKETING MANAGER where education and ability would have valuable application and lead to advancement.
3. To work with people responsibly and creatively, helping them develop personal and professional skills.
4. A position in international marketing which makes use of my specialization in marketing and my knowledge of foreign markets.
5. To bring Faith, Hope, and Charity to the American workplace.
6. To succeed in sales.
7. To design and maintain web pages.
Expert Answer
Correction – To use my acquired knowledge of accounting to be a beneficial part of the organization and contribute to its growth.
2. A progressively responsible position as a MARKETING MANAGER where education and ability would have valuable application and lead to advancement.
Correction – A responsible position as a MARKETING MANAGER where education and ability would have valuable application and lead to advancement.
The term progressive responsible adds 5 – 10 years to the timeline. It is a sign of stagnation in the career.
3. To work with people responsibly and creatively, helping them develop personal and professional skills.
Correction – To work with people helping them develop personal and professional skills.
Terms such as responsible and creative should not be used.
4. A position in international marketing which makes use of my specialization in marketing and my knowledge of foreign markets.
Correction – A position in international marketing which helps me to use of my specialization in marketing and my knowledge of foreign markets.
The individual should use sentences that prove that they have knowledge that can be used to benefit the company and not in the way that the organization has to device techniques of making the individual use their knowledge.
5. To bring Faith, Hope, and Charity to the American workplace.
Correction – To be of assistance and bring confidence to the American workplace.
Terms such as faith, hope, and charity should not be used.
6. To succeed in sales.
Correction – To perform well as a part of the company’s sales force.
Success is a relative term it has to be measured by the key performance metrics.
7. To design and maintain web pages.
Drop the sentence as it feels like the basic job requirement.
